Crimes from the childhood

Una prueba que hice para AVATAR, disfruten.

ROBOCOP
Crimes from the childhood
(Fragment)

By Homero Rios

Page 1

(In this beginning, we will see all the things on the perspective of the murderer. So, put panels with the face of the women, begin´ and screaming, in the middle of a struggle. This scene is very important, because I think can take to the reader and transports him right in to the crime scene. So feel free to make it soft Gore)

PANEL 1

(The face of the woman)

Caption: I can´t contain the fury that led inside of me.

WOMAN: Please! Don’t!!

Caption: Is nothing more than just pure violence…and rage.

PANEL2

(The hands of the killer over the woman´s face)

Caption: And a bloody rage.

WOMAN: Help! Agghh!!

PANEL 3

Caption: It´s impossible to describe… It’s like try to explain the true nature of man.

(The woman fall)

PANEL4

Caption: And the true nature of his crimes.

(At the final panel, maybe can turn the angle a little bit just to watch the face of the victim on the floor and the footsteps of the killer walking away on the back).




Page2

PANEL 1

(The body it´s in the center, there´s some police vehicles and the truck of the morgue waiting during the investigation. And some cops are searching for evidence. The place for the crime scene can be design based on the streets of Metro West)

CAPTAIN: What we have sergeant?

SERGEANT: A woman cap´, she was murdered...A whore.

PANEL 2

(The captain approaches to the sergeant, who´s searching carefully on the body for some proofs)

CAPTAIN: Nothing weird on this Neighborhood. Any sign of torture or sexual abuse?

SERGEANT: That’s the strange thing Cap; There´s no signs of sexual abuse, but…

CAPTAIN: But what?

PANEL 3

(This angle shows the post-mortem expression from de victim)

SERGEANT: The way that they beat her.... I have never seen anything like before.


PANEL 4

(Captain took his radio)

CAPTAIN: That’s because you don’t lived in Downtown with the fanatics of the Devil´s night!Don’t worry Sergeant, I have de right person for the job.





Page 3:

(Inside Sinclair´s vehicle, a Cadillac Eldorado 76´)

PANEL 1

RADIO: Detective Sinclair; What´s your position? Over.

RADIO: Sinclair, Sinclair!!This is the Captain. Where the hell are you?!

PANEL 2

SINCLAIR: Don’t worry granny....here I come, over.

PANEL3

(Sinclair gets out of the car and immediately put a cigarette on his mouth)

CAPTAIN: Move your ass Sinclair; Here´s something that you need to see.

PANEL 4

SINCLAIR: F you Cap´. Now…. What we got here?

CAPTAIN: See by yourself… Take, this is the preliminary report.(Extends the folder)

SINCLAIR: Tanks….let´s see.

PANEL 5

(Sinclair approaches to the body)

SINCLAIR: Oh my Gosh… This isn’t pretty…

SINCLAIR: No weapons, no sexual contact, maybe is just another freak on the street…. Any witness?

SERGEANT: A child; across the street…

SINCLAIR: Damn.

SERGEANT: What?

SINCLAIR: I don’t have any more cigarettes. Ok, any way…. Straight to the point; the kid.

SINCLAIR: Can I talk to him?

PANEL 6

CAPTAIN: Feel free to work lazy-boy!

SINCLAIR: Tanks grandma…

Page 4

PANEL 1

(Sinclair´s crossing the street)

Caption: I never work with kids. That´s the house rules….

Caption: I did it for once. When I was on the special victims unit.

Panel 2

(The kid, standing with his bike on a side….looks to Sinclair straight in the eye)

Caption: But…. Out of the record?

Caption: I prefer investigate corpses on Homicide department. They don’t have any innocence ready to be broken.

PANEL 3 (In front of the child)

SINCLAIR: Hey kid….Can you please give me your name?

PANEL 4

ALEX: (No dialogue)

PANEL 5

SINCLAIR: What´s the matter? Don’t like the cops? Maybe it´s because you ´r a punk or something like that isn’t?

ALEX: No Sr.

PANEL 6

SINCLAIR: So, What´s your name boy?

ALEX: Alex….Alex Murphy

SINCLAIR: Good. Now, Alex, some of the fat people in uniform over there, tell me that maybe you can know something about that poor lady on the cross street…. It´s that true?

ALEX: I don’t saw too much….

SINCLAIR: Don’t worry son, everybody say that at the beginning…. What were you doing here on the first place?

PANEL 7

ALEX: I was just riding my bike….

SINCLAIR: Right. Then what?

ALEX: Just… I saw a man with a big black jacket walking away from the body, that’s all….Then maybe a neighbor called to the police, I don’t know.

PANEL 8

SINCLAIR: Ok, so. If you saw the body…. Why you don’t just, run away?

ALEX: I don’t …..I was just scared ok?

SINCLAIR: Find kid…. Let me put it on my report.

SINCLAIR: Ok, that will be all. But please, if you remember something else….call me to this number.

PANEL 9

ALEX: Right… So, can I go now?

SINCLAIR: Yeah…. You can go. Stay out of trouble.

Page 5

PANEL 1

(Sinclair crosses the street again)

PANEL 2

COP: What the heck you do?! That’s our only witness!

SINCLAIR: Relax official….Remember who´s the Detective here. Now go and do your job; get some donuts or something with fat, would ya?

PANEL 3

COP: Jurke….

PANEL 4

(Sinclair gets into his car)

SINCLAIR: Yeah, whatever….Your wife said the same thing about you.

Caption: Why do you think that I’m a detective?

Page 6

PANEL 1

(the Cadillac goes away from the crime scene)

Caption: For the payment?

PANEL 2

(A central panel, shows a full moon)
Caption: Bullshit.

PANEL 3
(A nice neighborhood, Alex arrive on his bike)

Caption: Because I don’t buy all the dirty lies from the witnesses….

Caption: Especially all the dirty lies from a 12 years old boy.

Page 7

PANEL 1
(On this page, we reveal just a part of the terrible secret. Alex search trough the window, seeking a person)

Caption: don’t know nothing about the crime?

Caption: Like I said….Bullshit.

PANEL 2

(Alex´s face reveals fear)
Caption: Something on my stomach tell me….That he knows something else.

PANEL 3

Caption: Something darker.

(Trough the window, Alex sees the Neighbor get home; wearing a big black jacket)

Page 8

(Police department)

PANEL 1(Sinclair´s desk)

Caption: Reports….I hate them.

Caption: It´s like tell to your mother on her face all the bad things that you had been done on school.

PANEL 2 (Close up to the detective´s face)

Caption: Or something like that…. You get the point any way.

PANEL 3 (Sinclair stand up of his chair)

SINCLAIR: Who cares? I will do later….

PANEL 4
(The Captain getting out from his Office)

CAPTAIN: Sinclair!! To my Office….Now!

PANEL 5
(Sinclair took his jacket and walk to the captain´s office)

SINCLAIR: Or maybe not.


Page 9

(Captain´s Leary Office)

PANEL 1

SINCLAIR: What I do now?

CAPTAIN: Tell me David, honestly….What’s your problem?

SINCLAIR: I asked first Cap´….

PANEL 2

CAPTAIN: Seriously…. It’s for Rebecca?

Caption: Don’t start with that, Jackass.

SINCLAIR: I don’t wanna talk about that right now .

CAPTAIN: You don’t have a choice son. Believe me when I say that everybody loved Becky…. She was just the perfect woman, truly; but she´s gone, she died….

CAPTAIN:Get over it. Live your life, do your work; Try yoga or some fagy stuff like that, and believe me, everything will be better….trust me on this one.

Caption: Again….Jackass

PANEL 3

SINCLAIR: I’m a good cop and you know that…. I don’t need this freaking therapy ok? I’m in a good shape. So, if you finish already, we have some work to do, remember that…. Let´s work then.

PANEL 4

CAPTAIN: Listen to me you prick! You need some…. (The phone rings) Oh, hold on a second.

CAPTAIN: This is the Captain Leary….What? When? ... You got to be kidding me.

CAPTAIN: Ok, we will be there soon. (Hang up)
Caption: It´s possible to be human without a conscience?

PANEL 5

SINCLAIR: What happen?

Caption: Without regrets?

CAPTAIN: Guess what? Another murder, the same modus “bloody” operandi…. But there’s something more….There’s a witness.

SINCLAIR: So?

Caption: Without fear?

PANEL 6

CAPTAIN: I’m telling you, I’m very old for this kind of shit. The witness it’s a twelve years old boy named Alex….Alex Murphy.

SINCLAIR: Damn it.

Caption: Without innocence?

TO BE CONTINUED….